Good song.

u choice good instruments for that melody. big 10

this one special

i really like yours idea, i don't know why but i like combination of sounds here.
10 even more.

Good and bad parts

I like the break beat and bass.
I don't like the strange voice!
Still, It's for a flash more than for listening pleasure I guess.
Drum and bass is the best!
I think you should get into making some full length drumnbass or the like. It's fun believe me!